Feedback, Analysis and Re-shoot Schedule

Rough Cut Feedback and Analysis

To compartmentalised each separate point into a list that we could go through one by one, the first list is what we need to change that has been addressed, the second list is things that were said but we decided against doing.

• Lauren felt the fogging up of the camera looked like a mistake.
• They agreed the ending was too abrupt, they felt they wanted to see him do more with the money like go to the bank or go to a car shop. 
• There were a few moments that appeared to blur, we reckon this is to do with the conversion type we used, and we will use something different for the final film.
• Cut the train shots down as they are too long, we get the meaning!
• The waking up shots of Rio's arm turning the alarm off need to be re-recorded, the angle of Rio's hand going in makes it not appear 1st person, and the camera wobble is very distracting, also the date on the phone is wrong.
• A few office shots are too long. For the example the shot of his head on the table is way too long, could cut it down to be so it cuts to a black slug as soon as his head hits the table.
• Add some music somewhere, at least when he is in his dream! Shows emotion and colour for him.
• Get rid of repeat shots in the mornings or make them as short as possible, the mornings needs to get exponentially snappier like in Groundhog Day, needs to keep the attention of the audience.
• The filter of one of the shots is much different than the others, needs to be adjusted.
• Credits need to be added.
• Delete the shot of Rio close-up at the train station, goes out of frame too much.
• Delete the Dave wipe, and replace it with a black slug with "Dave" at the start.
• Delete the photocopier screen shot, too bright.

We will be re-recording the alarm shots as we agree that it could cost us marks, we also film Rio going to HSBC with the money to expand on the ending and add music to increase the 'happiness' of the dream. The small cuts, shortening of clips, and small problems such as an incorrect filter, adding a filter and title of "Dave" will also be done.

• Should the blue REC button be red?
• Rio needs a coat, re-record.

A high amount of this feedback we agreed with and prepared to make adjustments with. However "re-recording the train shots of Rio with no coat" we disagreed with as we want the audience to sympathise with him, he is quite a depressing person and so he cares as to whether he hurts himself. Also the REC button being blue is a creative choice.

Conclusively, we were given a band 2/3 mark for our piece, and set ourselves the target of getting it to a high band 3.

We scheduled our re-shoot.

We need to make sure everything is shot well with good framing as there won't be an opportunity to redo them.