As a group we have decided that the treatment is accurate so no amendments need to be made, and we will show it to peers to gather feedback for improvements and highlights.
From talking to peers we gathered a few crucial points to consider:
From talking to peers we gathered a few crucial points to consider:
- "It feels like there should be some more explanation of who "Dave" is, maybe something at the start to show him at home or something." - Jack.
- "Needs more detail as to what happens when he is happy." - Kennedy.
- "The ending is really hard-hitting, it has a good impact." - Hinks.
- "I like the idea of bird-poo and missing the bus, comedy-gold!" - Matt.
From this we have decided that we should add a section at the start that exposes Dave at his home, we had the idea of taking the montage shots of him getting ready, so that it is concise and informative, like this scene in the style of "Shaun of the Dead":
Now that we have a solid film treatment, we can now focus on writing the script.
